My Summer

Remember. . .

On the hot beaming  Waitangi day

With my friends

Going on all the outrageous rides for free?  

Having a nice cold refreshing slushy,

While my dad was selling car parks to make Some money.

Staring with  amazement at how many cars he parked on the lawn.

That was summer.

I was learning to notice and write a descriptive piece of writing of what I did in the holidays. For my first line I had to write what I was doing in a descriptive way, Then I had to describe something that was happening, after that I had to write  Something I did in  an interesting way, Next I had to write why I did it. Then I had to figure the rest of the structure out.  I think I did well by being descriptive and using interesting words. I think I could improve on my similes.